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….more pollutions have been done by humans.

-à………………………… caused……      單字和其它字的<固定搭配>

      to reduce/ cause/ prevent/ worsen pollution

例外:  How do pollution affect us?

The huge amount of carbon dioxide discharged by the burning of fuels, making the climate change.

--à 缺少主動詞………………………………………...…….makes the climate change more drastic.

(run-on sentences) 未斷句---未適當的使用標點符號

Climate change is the obvious result, serious floods and droughts happen simultaneously indifferent areas, the melting ice sheets cause the sea level to rise greatly per year, some of the animals which live in the Polar areas are endangered.

多餘的字

Now what can we do it to reduce the damange?  (句中what 和 it 功能一樣,是do 的受詞)

句型的誤用:

Although individual efforts are small, but together we can make a huge difference.

學測/指考作文,批改者皆是大學教授, you 的使用,較不恰當; 換成 we , us 較佳

You may have noticed a special section on your electricity bills.

前後因果關係的指出  because/ because of /   result in/from    as a result/ hense/ therefore

Second, we can turn off air-conditioners and eat more vegetables.  So, if we can do above things.

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Second, we can turn off air-conditioners and eat more vegetables because air-conditioners contain coolants that pollutes the atmosphere, and raising cattle requires more energy and resources than planting vegetables.

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In recent years, technology and industry have improved, the use of energy is increasing.

---àIn recnet years, technology and industry have expanded so much that the use of energy is also increasing.

注意中英文句子的差別,英文句型要求 <主詞> + <動詞> (受詞 – 名詞子句) (形容詞子句)…

The consequences of the bizarre weather events happened on earth these few yeass are not just a simplicity reason culd account for.

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There is no single reason to account for the conseuqences from the bizarre weather events that have happened in the last few years.